Discussing Cause-2 (revised)

 There are several reasons why Mr. Williams’ business failed. First, the store’s position was not good because it was located next to the Fairfax Apartment Building which was on a small side street just outside of town. Thus, it was not easy for people to notice it. Besides, there were two large music stores that was three miles away from a shopping center. Therefore, many people would go to the two stores instead of Williams’. The second reason is the music style which Mr. Williams bought. Most of the CDs were hip-hop and rock, however, people who live in the Fairfax are almost at the age above 41. Hence, this kind of age group wouldn’t like such two music styles. Moreover, the pay that Mr. Williams paid his employees was too high. Eventually, he couldn’t afford it. The most important reason is that the time that the store opened was too short. Consequently, few people would walk past the store or even enter the store. For several reasons above, I suppose that Mr. Williams should think twice when he makes any decision.