I wouldn’t forget what happened on my birthday this year. When I got up, I found a big teddy bear put on my bed. I was glad but confused and wondered that who was the owner of the teddy bear. Few minutes later, my mother came to my room and called me with joy. Then my brother followed by mom handing me a birthday cake as well as a big hand-made card. Suddenly, I found that the day was my birthday. I was surprised because he never did it to anyone. Soon after, many friends of mine came to my home and we had a party. They gave me many blessings, and we did have a lot of fun at that significant day. That was really my day. I’ll bear the day in mind forever.
bear好像是壞心情...??
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回覆刪除Then my brother followed by mom handing ..
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bear?
bury?
Your brother is a very good person.
回覆刪除That was a very wonderful experience.
Then my brother followed by mom handing me a birthday cake as well as a big hand-made card
回覆刪除怪怪的 假如你媽媽先進來那怎麼是你brother跟呢?而且如果是跟著一個人可以主動吧 這樣你的句子沒有真正的動詞
at that significant day不確定是at還on
I was glad but confused and wondered that who was the owner of the teddy bear
回覆刪除覺得這句可以用分詞構句 而且同個句子有 but and 也會讓人誤會
整篇可以讓人分享你的喜悅
但是有沒有一點點太短!!
we did have a lot of fun at that significant day. 我覺得是on that....day
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