2011年3月2日 星期三

my experience

     I once lived in Taipei, and worked as a volunteer in a hospital. It really felt good to get the opportunities to help people. One morning an elderly woman, with a bloody head, was sent to the hospital by a stranger. Seeing the situation, I shuddered involuntarily and became worried. Few minutes later, a nurse rushed out of the emergency room hastily and asked for anyone who with blood type O in the hospital. However, there was no one replied her asking. Suddenly, I found that I was the one who with blood type O. Due to being afraid of making an injection, I hesitated about making the decision to reply the nurse for her help. After a while, I decided to do it and then followed her to drew my blood. After the operation, the woman was out of danger and knew that I saved her and she told me she was really thanked for my help. At that moment, I realized that I've done a right thing.

8 則留言:

  1. replied her asking 奇怪
    the one who with blood type O 這邊who不用吧?

    After the operation, the woman was out of danger and knew that I saved her and she told me she was really thanked for my help.
    這句的連接詞太多了吧?

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  2. (1) who with blood type O 要完整子句所以要加be動詞
    (2) reply the nurse for her help 感覺for怪怪的 要不要另尋高手確定~"~
    (3) that I saved her 加的life比較好吧
    (4) was really thanked for my help 都thank 就不能在有前面的be動詞 除非你是thankful

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  3. an elderly woman, with a bloody head 不用逗號

    who with blood type O in the hospital.
    要有動詞ㄅ

    there was no one replied her asking 雙動詞

    Due to being afraid of making an injection
    只想說 捐血好!!


    drew my blood 原形是draw

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  4. bloody head, was sent 這裡應該也不用逗點

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  5. the woman was out of danger and knew that I saved her and she told me she was really thanked for my help. 這句我覺得可以用兩句來寫
    因為用太多連接詞了! 內容不錯哦 :)

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  6. 文章具有想像力 故事劇情編的很好 很寫實 只是你好像沒有去當過義工吧!!

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